Thursday, 28 March 2013

Passion



Draw in my heart a simple white candle
That I may find you in the everyday-
Fallen maple leaf, a verse on Sunday
Morning, a rose bloom amidst the bramble-

Mark my footsteps to amble beside you,
Slow and fast, through the season’s twist & sway,
When the moon tide is low, sands dip & stray -
When the sun rises like a fire, be true

To your words, cast long ago in the wind,  
Written in your blood, passion’s sacrifice  

To behold your eyes amongst brothers, dimmed
Of sight.   Lifting my kin, sacred chalice  

To your lips.   A spring awakening, twined
With hope that all I offer will suffice-





Written for:   Poets United - Verse First:   Passion ~   Happy Easter to everyone ~  
and D'verse poets PubMiltonian (or Miltonic) sonnet - Thanks to Sam Peralta - My pattern is not perfect, but oh well ~

Picture credit:   Kim Nelson

54 comments:

  1. Happy Easter Heaven, absolutely love this, really puts me into the Spring mood which is good because right now I need to stay positive in that aspect, it's so cold in Ireland at the minute!

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    1. Spring should be here soon ~ Thank you Matthew ~

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  2. A beautiful, heartfelt verse
    expression is overflowing
    Happy Easter to you!

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    1. Happy Easter to you too Leslie ~

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  3. the first two lines are lovely, Grace!

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    1. Those lines came to me this early morning ~ Thanks Dezzy ~

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  4. nice....great use of the form...and i like the internal rhymes you got going on as well...like amble...the rose amidst the bramble is a cool image as well..love the implied intimacy as well in those last 6 lines....very well done grace..

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    1. Thank you Brian for the support and encouragement Brian ~ A very challenging form, I must admit ~

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  5. Very beautifully done. The sonnet is perfection and the message you express is profoundly beautiful: "with hope that all I offer will suffice".

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    1. Thank you Sherry ~ I appreciate your lovely words ~

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  6. i like the images..the drawing a candle in the heart so you have the connection in the everyday...the words written in blood and the passion of sacrifice...really cool job on the form as well grace

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  7. Such an awakening would be fine by me, you can even make the snow melt at your sea.

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  8. Such beautiful images. I love what you brought from the form.

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  9. Written in your blood, passion’s sacrifice - Wonderful line that captures the real heart. Great poem and lovely thoughts. Have a great easter, your poems touch my heart.

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  10. Bring on spring!!! I love your smooth words flowing like silk sheets. Nicely done.

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  11. Oh what a great Easter passion poetry. Really befitting ;-)

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  12. Form and content doing each other justice and befitting the subject.

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  13. a beautiful poem - and excellent use of a tough form

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  14. ...find you in the everyday... an expression of the ideal. I like your work with the form, Grace. Perfect or not, the end result is quite lovely.

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  15. Not quite perfect to the Miltonic form, which is derived from the Petrarchan and Italian sonnet forms, but a fine poem.

    Happy Easter, Grace

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  16. A tribute to faith is always a beautiful thing to write. Enjoy your long weekend.

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  17. Lovely work--there is a sacrifice in love, but worth it to have someone to share the fallen leaves and rose blooms with.

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  18. Love this poem, the imagery is so powerful.

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  19. A beautiful write Heaven.

    Anna :o]

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  20. Like breathing a living persona from a beautiful painting! Delightful!

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  21. Wonderful to have a passion poem, beautiful and so timely.

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  22. Grace - A nice poem of passion.

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  23. Beautiful Grace!
    I love the tenderness in your poem~ :D

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  24. This reads smoother than most I've read in this form. Beautiful Grace! Happy Easter!

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  25. Oh! You've crafted a wonderfully traditional sonnet here, perhaps a subtle variance in rhyme scheme, but the essence is here, that lyrical and passionate fire that one looks for, especially in a love poem.

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    1. Thank you for the wonderful challenge form Sam ~

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    2. I forgot to say, it's also such a perfect poem to honor the season ...wishing you a Happy Easter!

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    3. Happy Easter Sam ~ Thank you for the lovely words ~

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  26. I love your simple title going into that first line: "Draw in my heart a simple white candle"

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  27. Beautiful. There's hope there. I loved the passiflora picture, too.

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  28. You've used the form superbly well here. Love the result.

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  29. So beautiful - all wonderful but that first stanza - perfection - K

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  30. Lovely depiction of seeking a deeper relationship.

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  31. Superb...!! Lines are awesome...

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  32. Wish you Happy Easter. Very poetic verses and matching with very beautiful flower opening to welcome spring!

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  33. Profound!! With an ode to the sacrifice made on good friday to wish for hope of an easter...very very beautiful

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  34. Easy flowing and beautiful sonnet. Happy Easter!

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  35. stunning! quite easy to get lost within your words—with such beautiful images. I particularly like the opening stanza.

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  36. Thank you!! for pointing out the error in the rhyming scheme in my post. have re-worked and posted a new draft. Will be happy if you would come by and read!

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  37. This is a keeper, Grace. Quite moving for me.

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  38. just beautiful... almost a whisper

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  39. A lovely Easter poem - I especially like the finding of the miraculous in the everyday. k .

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  40. This is a wonderful read! Well done.
    Cheers from Cottage Country!

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  41. Love the sound of this offering, Heaven. It works. sometimes there's beauty in imperfection. That's why poetry will always be the closest to my heart - above all other literary forms.

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