Draw in my heart a simple white candle
That I may find you in the everyday-
Fallen maple leaf, a verse on Sunday
Morning, a rose bloom amidst the bramble-
Mark my footsteps to amble beside you,
Slow and fast, through the season’s twist & sway,
When the moon tide is low, sands dip & stray -
When the sun rises like a fire, be true
To your words, cast long ago in the wind,
Written in your blood, passion’s sacrifice
To behold your eyes amongst brothers, dimmed
Of sight. Lifting my kin, sacred chalice
To your lips. A
spring awakening, twined
With hope that all I offer will suffice-
Written for: Poets United - Verse First: Passion ~ Happy Easter to everyone ~
and D'verse poets Pub - Miltonian (or Miltonic) sonnet - Thanks to Sam Peralta - My pattern is not perfect, but oh well ~
Picture credit: Kim Nelson
Happy Easter Heaven, absolutely love this, really puts me into the Spring mood which is good because right now I need to stay positive in that aspect, it's so cold in Ireland at the minute!
ReplyDeleteSpring should be here soon ~ Thank you Matthew ~
DeleteA beautiful, heartfelt verse
ReplyDeleteexpression is overflowing
Happy Easter to you!
Happy Easter to you too Leslie ~
Deletethe first two lines are lovely, Grace!
ReplyDeleteThose lines came to me this early morning ~ Thanks Dezzy ~
Deletenice....great use of the form...and i like the internal rhymes you got going on as well...like amble...the rose amidst the bramble is a cool image as well..love the implied intimacy as well in those last 6 lines....very well done grace..
ReplyDeleteThank you Brian for the support and encouragement Brian ~ A very challenging form, I must admit ~
DeleteVery beautifully done. The sonnet is perfection and the message you express is profoundly beautiful: "with hope that all I offer will suffice".
ReplyDeleteThank you Sherry ~ I appreciate your lovely words ~
Deletei like the images..the drawing a candle in the heart so you have the connection in the everyday...the words written in blood and the passion of sacrifice...really cool job on the form as well grace
ReplyDeleteSuch an awakening would be fine by me, you can even make the snow melt at your sea.
ReplyDeleteSuch beautiful images. I love what you brought from the form.
ReplyDeleteWritten in your blood, passion’s sacrifice - Wonderful line that captures the real heart. Great poem and lovely thoughts. Have a great easter, your poems touch my heart.
ReplyDeleteBring on spring!!! I love your smooth words flowing like silk sheets. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteOh what a great Easter passion poetry. Really befitting ;-)
ReplyDeleteForm and content doing each other justice and befitting the subject.
ReplyDeletea beautiful poem - and excellent use of a tough form
ReplyDelete...find you in the everyday... an expression of the ideal. I like your work with the form, Grace. Perfect or not, the end result is quite lovely.
ReplyDeleteNot quite perfect to the Miltonic form, which is derived from the Petrarchan and Italian sonnet forms, but a fine poem.
ReplyDeleteHappy Easter, Grace
A tribute to faith is always a beautiful thing to write. Enjoy your long weekend.
ReplyDeleteLovely work--there is a sacrifice in love, but worth it to have someone to share the fallen leaves and rose blooms with.
ReplyDeleteLove this poem, the imagery is so powerful.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful write Heaven.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Like breathing a living persona from a beautiful painting! Delightful!
ReplyDeleteWonderful to have a passion poem, beautiful and so timely.
ReplyDeleteGrace - A nice poem of passion.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, Grace!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful Grace!
ReplyDeleteI love the tenderness in your poem~ :D
This reads smoother than most I've read in this form. Beautiful Grace! Happy Easter!
ReplyDeleteOh! You've crafted a wonderfully traditional sonnet here, perhaps a subtle variance in rhyme scheme, but the essence is here, that lyrical and passionate fire that one looks for, especially in a love poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the wonderful challenge form Sam ~
DeleteI forgot to say, it's also such a perfect poem to honor the season ...wishing you a Happy Easter!
DeleteHappy Easter Sam ~ Thank you for the lovely words ~
DeleteI love your simple title going into that first line: "Draw in my heart a simple white candle"
ReplyDeleteLovely seasonal poem
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. There's hope there. I loved the passiflora picture, too.
ReplyDeleteYou've used the form superbly well here. Love the result.
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful - all wonderful but that first stanza - perfection - K
ReplyDeleteLovely depiction of seeking a deeper relationship.
ReplyDeleteThis is utterly beautiful.
ReplyDeleteSuperb...!! Lines are awesome...
ReplyDeleteWish you Happy Easter. Very poetic verses and matching with very beautiful flower opening to welcome spring!
ReplyDeleteProfound!! With an ode to the sacrifice made on good friday to wish for hope of an easter...very very beautiful
ReplyDeleteEasy flowing and beautiful sonnet. Happy Easter!
ReplyDeletestunning! quite easy to get lost within your words—with such beautiful images. I particularly like the opening stanza.
ReplyDeleteThank you!! for pointing out the error in the rhyming scheme in my post. have re-worked and posted a new draft. Will be happy if you would come by and read!
ReplyDeleteThis is a keeper, Grace. Quite moving for me.
ReplyDeletejust beautiful... almost a whisper
ReplyDeleteA lovely Easter poem - I especially like the finding of the miraculous in the everyday. k .
ReplyDeleteThis is a wonderful read! Well done.
ReplyDeleteCheers from Cottage Country!
Love the sound of this offering, Heaven. It works. sometimes there's beauty in imperfection. That's why poetry will always be the closest to my heart - above all other literary forms.
ReplyDeletebeautifully peaceful
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