clinging to your hair, dripping of corn and sun
bursting at the seams with rounded seeds
the shell case broke open, replete with seeds,
and for the first time, my tongue tasted morning,
naked, lush pulp, succulent fruit under bittersweet sun
nothing prepared me for you, flaming the sun
sky with words drizzling like apple knotted seeds,
staining my room forever silky bold, unlike any mornings
this morning, sun dawned, tinged red of pomegranate seeds
~0~0~0~
She wasn’t petite nor blushing peach lady.
Tall with broad arms, sturdy legs, like her Dad
except for soft brown eyes.
Fiercely ambitious, she tackled her career,
like a charging bull.
But, when he finally proposed after 7 years,
She melted, purring like kitten.
Nowadays, her smile eclipses
diamond-studded ring which she proudly wears.
First post: Posted for D'verse Poets Pub: Tritina
Second post: Flash Fiction Friday - A post in 55 words, for the G-man. An office mate recently got engaged.
Thanks for the visit.
picture credit: here
oh wow...marvelous imagery grace.....love the taste of morning....great hit in that ...and pomegranite too...i really enjoy that...ha the sun staining the room.....wicked good...smiles.
ReplyDeleteThanks Brian for the lovely words and visit ~
Deleteand nice 55 too...the willingness to give it up for him...or at least temper it says much...
ReplyDeleteMaybe temper but we will see ~ Smiles ~
Delete... not sure she gave the career up... she just purrs as she goes along now :) And she has a beautiful body and all, but his arm and hand are what make the photo! (but that's just me. ;P
ReplyDeleteThanks Margaret for the visit and support ~
DeleteGrace, this is just beautiful. The form is totally lost in your poem, as it all flows so very naturally. You write with such a fine and gentle brush. Love the last line of the Tritina.
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely thing to say Mary ~ I appreciate it ~
DeletePhewwww... on both counts. The Tritina has some lovely imagery 'succulent fruit under bittersweet sun' but the 55 is ...hot, hot, hot.
ReplyDeleteLucky couple. That is a great pics G man will be pleased ;)
Ha...ha...Thanks Bren ~
DeleteOnce more a wonderful weave of words, second one was really steamy, even referencing a kitten, that cat likes that, even though humans can't quite pull it off, but he won't hold that against you hahaha
ReplyDeleteNo one can purr as the cat~ Thanks Pat for the visit ~
DeleteGrace...
ReplyDeleteYour post is living up to your blog name tonight Missy.
Loved your Matrimonial 55.
Thank you for always providing Top Shelf Entertainment!!
You Rock The Province!!
Thanks for playing, thanks for your awesome support, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
Really, nice compliments G-man ~ Have a kick ass weekend too ~
DeleteGrace my deepest apologies for posting here.
DeleteI have been trying to comment but the box keep disappearing on me.
I love both your pieces. I love the way you sensually described the taste of morning. Your 55 is a great piece! Love it!
Mine is here
Have you a ROCKING AND BLESSED WEEKEND!!!
hugs
shakira
The first is just beautiful, Grace. And I love the strength in the second.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the lovely words and visit Patti ~
DeleteLoved them both, Grace. The tritina so effortless - the images so full of life and color completely overwhelmed my senses. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful telling of love, grace.
ReplyDeleteFirst the discovery of the raw beauty,
Then the surrender of self to only the one.
Perfect
Rick
Both lovely poems - the second especially made me smile! k.
ReplyDeletelovely images in this grace...esp. liked...flaming the sun
ReplyDeletesky with words drizzling like apple knotted seeds...so visual
beautifully, beautiful!!!
ReplyDeleteAnd I so very loved the last lines of the 2nd poem...wow!!!
I just woke up and what a wonderful way to greet the day with these words. Congratulations to your mate at work and your poem would make a lovely present.
ReplyDeleteVery sensuous, the tritina. Impressive, what you got out of the form.
ReplyDeleteBoth beautifully done.
ReplyDeletesuch a lovely, realistic poem, Heaven!
ReplyDeleteI love ".the sea tide followed you this morning"...sounds like a perfect night ;)
ReplyDeleteLoved this line...
ReplyDeletethis morning, sun dawned, tinged red of pomegranate seeds
Love this...gorgeous lines...the sea tide followed you this morning,
ReplyDeleteclinging to your hair, dripping of corn and sun
bursting at the seams with rounded seeds :)
Great stuff. Sets the scene very well.
ReplyDeleteThese are both wonderful! I love the romance I always find here.
ReplyDeleteOh! How lovely, both!
ReplyDeleteBoth very fluid and beautiful. Were I your office mate, I'd be honoured to have been the subject of your poetry!
ReplyDeleteLook at you delivering all the way around. Cool how the tritina spins and lovely 55 :)
ReplyDeleteWritten with fluid imagery ~~ finely weaving us into the narrative!
ReplyDeleteJust gorgeous sensuality in this writing. I love the way various forms of sensuality (taste, touch) are used.
ReplyDeleteDelicious words! Both poems are delightful!
ReplyDeleteIt's great Heaven! you wove the poems around so beautifully. And the pics are desirable and enticing!
ReplyDeleteHank
Great writes. I really love your peaches, want to shake your tree. :)
ReplyDeleteAh, you had me with the first line, the following tide, all the way to the pomegranate seed red of dawn at the conclusion. Wonderfully woven, so subtly that you were able to hide the skein of the tritina in the pattern of your poem. This made my night.
ReplyDeletepeaches have always represented something really good to me.
ReplyDeleteagain...dazzling us with your words. i just love the pictures they always create in my head.
sun and peaches melted my thoughts into sweetness. a deeply lovely poem and so smooth a tritina.
ReplyDeletetwo very nice pieces. Really like the way you worked with the Tritina, very nice job. The character drawn in the second piece has so much depth for a poem its size, magnificent piece. Thanks
ReplyDeletea wicked weave that is so full and vibrant
ReplyDeleteYour poems are always a treat, so rich. I love what you do with words.
ReplyDeleteof this morning sun: really beautiful imagery. the second stanza quite tantalizing, especially with the final words, "pomegranate seeds." Such an interesting and tasty fruit.
ReplyDeletepeaches: I enjoyed the transformation. I can actually picture that beautiful broad smile.
just awesome!
ReplyDeleteSuch a beautiful statement on the duality of purpose.
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