at the tip of my tongue,
it dances slowly,
awakening spring bud,
unfurling pink leaf
it dances slowly
ballerina on tiptoes
unfurling pink leaf
stretches arms wide open
ballerina on tiptoes
like a cocktail glass,
stretches arms wide open
leaps in mid-air, lingering
like a shaken cocktail,
awakening taste buds,
to leap in mid-air, then lingers
at the tip of my tongue
~0~0~0~0~0~0~
I prefer the verb
to the noun
when I am
with you
dripping
so slowly
or faster
as I want to
or moving up
and down
as I like to
sweating
cradling hips
gripping arms
writhing to music
at mid-point, adding dashes--
and punctuation points ! !, ending with a sigh~
First post: D'verse Poets Pub - Pantoum form
Second post: Flash Fiction Friday -for the G-man - Tell a story in 55 words ~
Shared with Poetry Jam - Verbs
picture credit: here
Pheeeew... to the verb. Very sexy. Loved the ballerina but... the verb...well... > WOW <
ReplyDeleteG-Man and a few others will need a cold shower. LOL..
Lovely write Grace.
Ha..ha...Thanks Bren ~ It was a fun write ~
DeleteDon't know why I have the urge to smoke when I finish reading some of your work. Very good, sensuous, well written, top shelf.
ReplyDeleteThanks Henry ~ I take it you like the shape too ~
DeleteBoth are so alive but wow to the 55. Just as close and sensual as can be, which of course I expect of thee. Happy day!
ReplyDeleteThanks Pat ~ Hey, that is my line ~ Smiles ~
DeleteHello.
ReplyDeleteI haven't visited in a while, but I see you still have that sensual touch (smile). Nice imagery and flow. Thanks for sharing.
Congratulations too on your award...saw your name mentioned over at Ashok's blog.
Thoughts Of Beauty In The Stillness Of Dawn...
Thanks Andy for visit and lovely words ~
DeleteWow. I DO smoke during and after reading your 'goodies', Peep! Not cigarettes...but my whole being. WHEW!
ReplyDeleteThanks.
PEACE!
(Still smokin')
Ha..ha...You are so funny Steve ~
Deletehaha i prefer the verb to the noun as well...smiles....love the curl in that 55 as well...and the heat...oh my...wonderful pantoum as well grace.....i am kinda partial to ballerinas...smiles.
ReplyDeleteI know you are ~ Thanks for the visit and support Brian ~
Deleteso sexy, hot, and I do love ending with a sigh :)
ReplyDeleteExcellent poem! Well written! I love the ending in a sigh...contentment!
ReplyDeleteJust gorgeous and quite...warming. Oh, forget warming, HOT...
ReplyDeleteGrace...
ReplyDeleteThe tip of spectacular...
And the 55? Tres Chaud!!
Thank You again for sharing your steamy musings.
You Rock...Have a Kick Ass Week-End
Adding punctuation points! :)
ReplyDeleteA lovely telling of desire. Shaken, not stirred. toes are always best when curled.
ReplyDeleterick
Love both of these Grace. The shape of the second was even sensual to go with the topic...love the 'verb over noun'... And the words on the tip of your tongue as if a ballerina on pointed toe...excellent! You are so good at what you do.
ReplyDelete"I prefer the verb to the noun when I am with you" - I love that. It oozes promise and action. Sensuality!
ReplyDeleteLove your 55.
ReplyDeleteThe 55 is fun the verbs are fun and the photo so elegant. Thanks
ReplyDeleteOh la la..this was the most sensual writing I've seen on here, Grace....beautiful!!!
ReplyDeleteExcellent! I agree it is very sensual.
ReplyDeleteLove the way you contrast in this poem the strict form of the pantoum - the held-back emotion of the first half - with the unwinding, freeform, lyricality of the sensual second half.
ReplyDeletesweating
ReplyDeletecradling hips
gripping arms
writhing to music
I can almost see a sultry dancer curling and writhing sensuously to the beat of slow music. Nicely done Heaven!
Hank
Very cool together. The tips of tongues busy here! (Sorry.) But very clever. k.
ReplyDeleteWe are talking dance...my is it hot in here?
ReplyDeleteboth your poems are dancing..playful and yep..i think i prefer verbs to nouns as well...smiles
ReplyDeleteThese are both sexy. Another excellent phantom from today's challenge.
ReplyDeleteI like the cocktail glass and the pink leaf.
ReplyDeleteAnd I don't think there is anything left to say about the other that flirts with me and has me put in my own dashes--I love dashes--
But I do like how both kiss the tip of your tongue.
Fine words!
Sensual and beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteA smoldering 55!
ReplyDeleteWow...the verb is hot, hot, hot all the way! Everything from the shape of the poem to the words work!!! Nice!
ReplyDeletegripping arms - nom nom!
ReplyDeleteJust lovely...
ReplyDeletebeautiful G!
ReplyDeleteSo beautifully written with such grace! So sexy! Love love love both! You have outdone yourself, Heaven! Have you a blessed weekend.
ReplyDeletehugs shakira
Mine is here
Wow. You're so talented. I love the first one and the way you obeyed the form. So well done. The second one is very steamy, but classy.
ReplyDeleteI love the movement in both pieces. Your pantoum flows as beautifully as the dance you describe. I don't know about verbs or nouns, but I adore punctuation...
ReplyDeleteGorgeous, as always. I love the release in the first one. And I'm sighing after the second. You take the sensual touch and place it so accurately into words. Adore~
ReplyDelete"I prefer the verb
ReplyDeleteto the noun
when I am
with you"
I love this line. :)
Oh me, oh my... you do know how to do sexy... where's my man? Yes, you've inspired me. It will be our little secret. Shhhhh... he won't mind. In fact, if he knew, he'd want to thank you. :)
ReplyDeleteSeriously hot verbs!
ReplyDeletenice selection of verbs, Heaven! whew!
ReplyDelete♥
Both writes are so sensual. A tribute to your wonderful style ...
ReplyDeleteAgreed. The verb was very sensual and I love the way the lines carry you through the poem!
ReplyDeleteawesome combination of rhythm, sensuality, formal structure and they were just dripping with oomph.fabulous stuff.
ReplyDeleteLove the pantoum! And then the verb poem provides such a nice counterpoint, I may never view punctuation the same way again...excellent as usual!
ReplyDeleteOne of the best pantoums I've read this week, and the flash fiction is evocative and sensuous. Smart writing!
ReplyDeleteYour have sensuality in your grip.
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