Thursday, 2 August 2012

Words at the tip of my tongue


at the tip of my tongue,
it dances slowly, 
awakening spring bud, 
unfurling pink leaf


it dances slowly
ballerina on tiptoes
unfurling pink leaf 
stretches arms wide open 


ballerina on tiptoes 
like a cocktail glass,
stretches arms wide open
leaps in mid-air, lingering    


like a shaken cocktail,   
awakening taste buds,
to leap in mid-air, then lingers      
at the tip of my tongue




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I prefer the verb        
          to the noun
                when I am
                     with you


                        dripping  
        
                    so slowly
       
               or faster
       as I want to
 or moving up
and     down


as I like to


sweating
cradling hips       
gripping  arms


writhing to music   


at mid-point, adding dashes--


and punctuation points ! !, ending with a sigh~




First post:   D'verse Poets Pub - Pantoum form
Second post:   Flash Fiction Friday -for the G-man - Tell a story in 55 words ~
Shared with Poetry Jam - Verbs    


picture credit:  here

51 comments:

  1. Pheeeew... to the verb. Very sexy. Loved the ballerina but... the verb...well... > WOW <
    G-Man and a few others will need a cold shower. LOL..
    Lovely write Grace.

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  2. Don't know why I have the urge to smoke when I finish reading some of your work. Very good, sensuous, well written, top shelf.

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    1. Thanks Henry ~ I take it you like the shape too ~

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  3. Both are so alive but wow to the 55. Just as close and sensual as can be, which of course I expect of thee. Happy day!

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    1. Thanks Pat ~ Hey, that is my line ~ Smiles ~

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  4. Hello.
    I haven't visited in a while, but I see you still have that sensual touch (smile). Nice imagery and flow. Thanks for sharing.
    Congratulations too on your award...saw your name mentioned over at Ashok's blog.

    Thoughts Of Beauty In The Stillness Of Dawn...

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    1. Thanks Andy for visit and lovely words ~

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  5. Wow. I DO smoke during and after reading your 'goodies', Peep! Not cigarettes...but my whole being. WHEW!
    Thanks.
    PEACE!

    (Still smokin')

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    1. Ha..ha...You are so funny Steve ~

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  6. haha i prefer the verb to the noun as well...smiles....love the curl in that 55 as well...and the heat...oh my...wonderful pantoum as well grace.....i am kinda partial to ballerinas...smiles.

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    1. I know you are ~ Thanks for the visit and support Brian ~

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  7. so sexy, hot, and I do love ending with a sigh :)

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  8. Excellent poem! Well written! I love the ending in a sigh...contentment!

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  9. Just gorgeous and quite...warming. Oh, forget warming, HOT...

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  10. Grace...
    The tip of spectacular...
    And the 55? Tres Chaud!!
    Thank You again for sharing your steamy musings.
    You Rock...Have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  11. Adding punctuation points! :)

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  12. A lovely telling of desire. Shaken, not stirred. toes are always best when curled.
    rick

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  13. Love both of these Grace. The shape of the second was even sensual to go with the topic...love the 'verb over noun'... And the words on the tip of your tongue as if a ballerina on pointed toe...excellent! You are so good at what you do.

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  14. "I prefer the verb to the noun when I am with you" - I love that. It oozes promise and action. Sensuality!

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  15. The 55 is fun the verbs are fun and the photo so elegant. Thanks

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  16. Oh la la..this was the most sensual writing I've seen on here, Grace....beautiful!!!

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  17. Excellent! I agree it is very sensual.

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  18. Love the way you contrast in this poem the strict form of the pantoum - the held-back emotion of the first half - with the unwinding, freeform, lyricality of the sensual second half.

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  19. sweating
    cradling hips
    gripping arms
    writhing to music

    I can almost see a sultry dancer curling and writhing sensuously to the beat of slow music. Nicely done Heaven!

    Hank

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  20. Very cool together. The tips of tongues busy here! (Sorry.) But very clever. k.

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  21. We are talking dance...my is it hot in here?

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  22. both your poems are dancing..playful and yep..i think i prefer verbs to nouns as well...smiles

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  23. These are both sexy. Another excellent phantom from today's challenge.

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  24. I like the cocktail glass and the pink leaf.
    And I don't think there is anything left to say about the other that flirts with me and has me put in my own dashes--I love dashes--
    But I do like how both kiss the tip of your tongue.

    Fine words!

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  25. Wow...the verb is hot, hot, hot all the way! Everything from the shape of the poem to the words work!!! Nice!

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  26. So beautifully written with such grace! So sexy! Love love love both! You have outdone yourself, Heaven! Have you a blessed weekend.
    hugs shakira
    Mine is here

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  27. Wow. You're so talented. I love the first one and the way you obeyed the form. So well done. The second one is very steamy, but classy.

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  28. I love the movement in both pieces. Your pantoum flows as beautifully as the dance you describe. I don't know about verbs or nouns, but I adore punctuation...

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  29. Gorgeous, as always. I love the release in the first one. And I'm sighing after the second. You take the sensual touch and place it so accurately into words. Adore~

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  30. "I prefer the verb
    to the noun
    when I am
    with you"

    I love this line. :)

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  31. Oh me, oh my... you do know how to do sexy... where's my man? Yes, you've inspired me. It will be our little secret. Shhhhh... he won't mind. In fact, if he knew, he'd want to thank you. :)

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  32. nice selection of verbs, Heaven! whew!

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  33. Both writes are so sensual. A tribute to your wonderful style ...

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  34. Agreed. The verb was very sensual and I love the way the lines carry you through the poem!

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  35. awesome combination of rhythm, sensuality, formal structure and they were just dripping with oomph.fabulous stuff.

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  36. Love the pantoum! And then the verb poem provides such a nice counterpoint, I may never view punctuation the same way again...excellent as usual!

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  37. One of the best pantoums I've read this week, and the flash fiction is evocative and sensuous. Smart writing!

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  38. Your have sensuality in your grip.

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