I learn my name in a dream-wheel
Two women walk, unconscious of eyes
that follow their hips & breasts swaying
Beneath my skin & layers of failures, a meaning
One woman carries a tray of berries
red & flowering, undisguised
she is unstoppable, the fruit of the season
Stirring guts-deep, a faint primitive impulse
The other woman is tender, draped of blooms
blue & evasive, a penumbra under a tree
she is on threshold of tasting a seed
Part-sun, part-shadow, I know her-
Eve
Two women walk, unconscious of eyes
that follow their hips & breasts swaying
Beneath my skin & layers of failures, a meaning
One woman carries a tray of berries
red & flowering, undisguised
she is unstoppable, the fruit of the season
Stirring guts-deep, a faint primitive impulse
The other woman is tender, draped of blooms
blue & evasive, a penumbra under a tree
she is on threshold of tasting a seed
Part-sun, part-shadow, I know her-
Eve
Posted for Imaginary Garden for Real Toads - Word Challenge by Hedgewitch - Mind & Symbol
"'We are to use at least five of the words from this list drawn from Chapter One of Carl Jung's Man & His Symbols, in your choice of either a poem utilizing a form, in a prose-poem, or in free verse. "
"'We are to use at least five of the words from this list drawn from Chapter One of Carl Jung's Man & His Symbols, in your choice of either a poem utilizing a form, in a prose-poem, or in free verse. "
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cool structure on this one grace, it could work as a cleave....two seperate poems or one all together...i like how you show both sides of one person in two people...great title as well....smiles.
ReplyDeleteThank you Brian, smiles ~
DeleteI like the way you have described these two women, Grace. And... I think we ALL know the one who is part sun and part shadow!
ReplyDeleteThank you Mary ~
DeleteSuch an innovative way of combining two poems - or threads - into one whole.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kerry ~
DeleteI love the first line of this, Heaven. It is just one of those emotional truths that I think perfectly steps out from the idea of the challenge and nails it. And as poetry, the form is intuitive and subtle, the whole lyric and musical, as well as full of hints of that other world beneath the seen and shown, the Unknown we carry that goes back all the way to those first symbols of fruitfulness and the creation myths--I sense a hint of Persephone here as well as Eve. Thanks so much for participating.
ReplyDeleteI didn't about Persephone but unconsciously I must have ~ Thanks for a lovely challenge ~
DeleteTwo sides to everything and everyone, as both try and struggle to be let out
ReplyDeleteThanks Pat ~
DeleteLove the phrase "dream-wheel", and "she is unstoppable" could be the most concise definition of woman I have read! I think all of the women I have known well have dual natures in that, even when they appear very strong and assertive, a closer look reveals a very tender self that calls out for loving. But I don't want to appear sexist. I think men have this dual nature as well.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the thoughtful comments Mark ~ I appreciate it ~
Delete"layers of failures," yet unstoppable. wow.
ReplyDeleteA paradox but aren't we all ~ Thanks Marian ~
DeleteHey, I know her!
ReplyDeleteYou too, smiles ~ Thanks Laurie ~
Deletedraped of blooms!
ReplyDeleteI love how you made before of them unique and blossom! Clever, Grace and so beautiful~
ReplyDeleteWhat a unique blending of two poems...together they create unity or each could easily stand alone...
ReplyDeleteGreat response to the prompt, Grace, and Jung would be proud of how you mix light and shadow into our humanity. Gentle supple weave of conversations, too.
ReplyDeleteYour words accompany Gaugain's painting to perfection.
ReplyDeleteFantastic write, two sides of self . . . two poems. Love this.
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