Sunday 22 June 2014

Summer sky


is a halved peach,
swelling of sugar, red  
on your tongue, rain 





We keep watch of summer fireflies
Flitting of orange red
Dazzling of lights, a symphony
Cloaking night with silk threads 

       Let's stay

               under the stolen sky

            twining

As two seed pods, marking
Time a bandit, for come sunrise
All too soon, we're parting 


The above poem follows Robert Herrick's stanza form:

x x x x x x x a
x x x x x b
x x x x x x x c
x x x x x b
d
x x x x x d
c
x x x x x e
x x x x x x x a
x x x x x e 



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23 comments:

  1. smiles...i like summer as a peach...
    and def hiding under those stolen skies...
    the last couple lines feel a bit of a rush to wrap up the story, probably due to the constraints of the form.

    happy sunday.

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  2. Aw. I like this summer under the skies. Too bad there will be parting at sunrise. Lovely writing Grace. I admire your use of form. I'm a coward, have been too afraid to fail at any form.

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  3. Parted can lead to much or not enough, great job with the form

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  4. Beautifully done, Grace. I love the stolen sky!

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  5. You managed the form beautifully..."twining As two seed pods, marking Time a bandit" Love it!

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  6. Deliciously sweet and tempting...time is a bandit--gotta steal those moments while you can...smiles...

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  7. Brings back memories, Grace. Especially the parting at sunrise.
    You did great with Herrick's stanza form. It was a fun write, huh?
    ..

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  8. 'Time a bandit'..how true...to be under the stolen sky is the best option...beautifully done...

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  9. Gorgeous and rich with colorful details- like the romance of a sunset!

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  10. A very sensual poem, Grace. You have captured that summer moment beautifully!

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  11. A feel of the forbidden about this one with lush imagery and sensual flow.Thank you for setting out.another new form. The last one I learnt from you was the Rictameter.I enjoyed your poem.

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  12. Time is a bandit that is so true Grace a lovely summer poem.

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  13. I love both these. Beautiful as always, and the Herrick stanza is an interesting form well handled.

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  14. I love the lovely scene you sketched with your words, Grace. Summer is way too short.

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  15. You never cease to amaze me with how well you convey love. Time really is a bandit sometimes. As always, thank you and have a fantastic week, my friend!

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  16. Ah, what a lovely poem! So romantic and it flows effortlessly through the form.

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  17. I'm agree - time is a bandit....All good - always too soon...ah...~ Nice, dreamy image...

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  18. A stolen sky.. yes sometimes that is what we need .. that sky can be the only friend for lovers.

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  19. Nice new form. It has a brevity that somehow appears full. Great write Grace!

    Hank

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  20. LOVE peach halves and sundowns, fireflies, drizzle, dazzle, symphonic sound and the cloaking that allows kisses to be deeper! A winner.

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  21. Wow...Grace you've worked magic with this form...so smooth, love those, "stolen skies!" Happy week to you as well!

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  22. Sounds pretty great and wonderful job with the form. k.

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  23. I love this form and what you did with it here--just magical

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