Monday, 13 February 2012

You

you are the morning
cup in my hands, warm bread toast
i inhale, eyes closed


~0~0


you are the music
sheet i write my song, frame white
in my darkest night 


~0~0


you are the summer
rain on my skin, blueberries
soft staining pale dew


~0~0


you are the evening 
rest on my bosom, folding
my wings to stillness




Poetry form:    Senryu (3 lines, 17 syllables)
I also wrote a similar senryu poem for The Haiku Challenge - it is here.   


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Happy hearts day !

47 comments:

  1. Wonderfully done, being ones everything, like how you described it and used different aspects to tickle the senses.

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  2. Beautiful, liked the 'music sheet' the best.

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  3. This is just a beautiful sensory experience. Wonderful write!

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  4. Not quite Caddoc and I, but nice ideas...

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  5. Exquisitely written - the things that change and those that remain.

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  6. lovely grace...i like the first b/c it is tactile and olfactory...and reading it i say yes...and the song int he second is great because it touches harmony...love touches all the senses for sure...

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  7. hotspicywings@yahoo.com13 February 2012 at 11:31

    love
    you

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  8. this is a poem for the senses...I thoroughly enjoyed it...nicely done!

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  9. This is soooo beautiful .... sensual and sensory ... love it!

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  10. If this one doesn't fit the bill for this posting...none will. Very smooth and very sexy, great job.

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  11. So lovely. I almost said "I love the first part, and the third, but wait, the second, and the fourth..."
    Senryu—I'll have to add this to my collection of poetic forms. Perfect for declarations of love.
    K

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  12. All beautiful ...

    Inspiring! Thank you.

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  13. VERY very beautiful. I love the form - succinct, and says it all so beautifully.

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  14. YOU and your words
    are the reason
    i keep coming back for more.

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  15. Beutiful and love the shot, both so sensual

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  16. what nice! I loe this heaven:)
    Happy valentines to you!

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  17. nice...summer rain and blueberry stains...can it get any better? smiles

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  18. YOU...are my everything! Sure like you style(s) week after sweet week!
    PEACE!

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  19. a poetic cycle...happy heart day indeed

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  20. Nice, nice metaphors and imagery. So very sensual and engaging. Always an enjoyment to stop at your blog.

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  21. The haikus work so well together, really nice job, really apt for today. Thanks

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  22. Beautifully done! Great imagery and sense of the body---


    @AudreyHowitt

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  23. Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful.

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  24. Beautifully romantic... Happy Valentine's Day!

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  25. I love haiku and how it creates deep silences. Your love and passion the silence and make it sing!

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  26. Romantic and sensuous. Perfect for Valentine's Day.

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  27. ~ Lovely ~ нαρρу ναℓєηтιηє'ѕ ∂αу ♥ нєℓєηα

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  28. Lovely, lovely...a short and succinct song to love and so beautifully written, Heaven.

    I can hear the music....magical.

    Lady Nyo

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  29. These are beautiful. I liked the first one especially - it has many resonances.

    I hope your day was at least as good as your poem.

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  30. absolutely lovely, Heaven! i especially love the third haiku.

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  31. Beautiful ...I think memories need to be shared with the one you love and I get the feel of that from this lovely poem thank you x x

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  32. Just lovely. So restful...and sensual. Love it, as always.

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  33. Beautiful! I love it!
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/02/14/i-cant-do-this-anymore/

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  34. A delightfully soothing batch of poems for the heart.

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  35. lovely. folding my wings to stillness -love that ending.

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  36. Someone above said this is lust... but it is too softly sweet, to knowing of the person to be lust. This is lovingly expressed...

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  37. Too me this is beautifully sensual...words of a lover

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