Sunday 9 August 2015

Woman to Man


This is the soil that labors 
beneath our feet, growing damp
with rain, with seeds
In late summer, a red blooming
that catches the sky's opal eyes

This is the leavening our bread 
seeks, the grit our veins inhale
when our ribs twine
petal & spine
imagining light spilling over us

This is the river-sap that seeks
our bodies, every valley & groove 
at rest, or rocking to birthing tides
The bones that shape your thighs strong
The fire that makes me arch my back

In the moonlight
This is our hunt & chase:
That we give & take
Each other's fruits, our tongues
running along this quicksilver blade-

Oh hold me, my fearless love- 




Title & poem inspired by Judith Wright


Posted for Imaginary Garden for Real Toads - Sunday's Challenge: Judith Wright  
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35 comments:

  1. Wow!! This is even better than the original :D
    Beautifully penned :D

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  2. The way you fill it with list and temptation instead of battles make me happier to read than Judith's version.. I guess both can exist.. Thank you for the great perspective.

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  3. The 'give & take' of love is evidenced throughout this poem, Grace. And the final line is breath-taking!

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  4. love flowing back and forth between two, sure shined on through

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  5. "This is the soil that labors" this line has so much pain and ecstatic joy...the whole poem is breathtaking...I'm speechless Grace...Wowzers!!

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  6. when our ribs twine petal & spine..is my favourite line..how very primal we can be...should be perhaps..you have captured the essence of desire superbly

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  7. I, too, prefer this one. Masterful piece.

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  8. That we give & take
    Each other's fruits, our tongues
    running along this quicksilver blade-

    Cannot be better than that. One glides through but it won't be easy on a quicksilver plane!. Great lines Grace!

    Hank

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  9. Good heavens, woman. This is hard-hitting poetry at its finest. Love, love, love every word! Great line breaks as well.

    These are my favorites:

    "This is the leavening our bread
    seeks, the grit our veins inhale
    when our ribs twine
    petal & spine"

    "This is the river-sap that seeks"

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  10. Everything comes in pair when it comes to love. A very sensual piece, Grace.

    i agree with cricket about the line breaks.

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  11. "every valley & groove
    at rest, or rocking to birthing tides"

    Beautiful, Grace.

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  12. "The bones that shapes your thighs strong
    The fire that makes me arch my back"

    Beautiful. Sensual. Deep sharing... a delicious love dance.

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  13. Wowzers! This one knocks my socks off. Especially powerful is the tongue running along the quicksilver blade.

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  14. Deep, sensual, real. Great.

    Thanks for visiting.

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  15. Who better to write a poem entitled 'Woman to Man' than you? You always take your reader deep beneath the surface of human relationships and remind us of the necessity of passion.

    I really enjoyed your featured poet's style.

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  16. A very sensual poem..the very bones of passion. My fav part

    in the moonlight
    This is our hunt & chase:
    That we give & take

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  17. This is so full of passion...the valleys and grooves, the give and take, the fruits...the arching of your back....wowza :-)

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  18. I am dreaming in anticipation :)

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  19. Beautiful on the Ms. Wright prompt. I wish now that my mom or sis had given me the Birds and Bees talk. I might have changed my sex. For sure I would have ha a better understanding of my life mate earlier in life. Dad instead said that I already knew it all from watching the cows on our farm.
    ..

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  20. Wow I am breathless reading these passionate words....truly a fabulous poem!

    Donna@LivingFromHappiness

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  21. Lovely and sensual: the cadence beautifully echoing the give and take; the close ... wonderfully romantic and yet, as real as a heartbeat.

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  22. and to this end like a river that flows into the mouth of an ocean, this is how love grows

    gracias, 'Grace-fully' said

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  23. A super sensual poem, Grace, that also has a wonderful earthiness and natural ness to it--very well done. The close works so well too--all really well integrated. Thanks for the great challenge. k .

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  24. What a glorious passionate poem.

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  25. I really like that line about birthing tides. This really made me stop and think. And I love that the whole thing has an undertone of almost discontent about it.

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  26. You can sure take an inspiration and use it well!

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  27. This is simply gorgeous, Grace.

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  28. This is magnificent...so many lines I love but especially this, "a red blooming
    that catches the sky's opal eyes" wow! Thank you for the inspiration!

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  29. Oh that love could ever be that fierce - and fearless. I like how you build it and build it through very passion-filled constructs as if to define it and maybe never quite. And the intimacy as you draw it to the close, running the tongue along the knife. That edge can be sharp. Very nice.

    FYI, shape, not shapes.

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  30. "the grit our veins inhale
    when our ribs twine
    petal & spine"
    What passion, really beautiful.

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  31. "the grit our veins inhale
    when our ribs twine
    petal & spine"
    What passion, really beautiful.

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  32. So earthy and amazing words, feelings so well expressed in your poem, Grace!

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