Still Life, 1670, detail by Jean François de Le Motte
you wrote a letter
and pinned it on the board
forgotten
you scribbled sweet nothings
across pamphelt and left it
dangling
you hid the truth under the
flowing strokes, obscure lines
in the journal of us
your words hammered
until they were rubber bands,
wounding tight around my chest
so don't look for me
in the wooden panels of the room,
pining for the ship to anchor us
i am outside,
stumbling for Forget-Me-Nots,
and dancing with the wind
Copy Right © 2012 Hannah Gosselin ~ Stumbling for Forget-Me-Nots
Posted for: The Mag 121
and Imaginary Garden with Real Toads: Photography by Hannah Gosselin
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ReplyDeleteSome great word play in this one, not to mention the imagery, truly excellent.
ReplyDeleteexcellent!! I got the picture right away!! Laurel
ReplyDeleteAwesome, Heaven.
ReplyDeleteLOVE:
"you hid the truth under the
flowing strokes, obscure lines
in the journal of us"
and
"i am outside,
stumbling for Forget-Me-Nots,
and dancing with the wind"
"don't look for me," indeed. Wonderful.
Hopefully you ind the forget me nots out there too.
ReplyDeleteA very nice theme to go with, wave length
ReplyDeleteTruth hidden in fancy flourishes...mmmm....spot on!
ReplyDeleteHow very beautiful. I love the originality of this piece, which combines both images seamlessly.
ReplyDeleteI love the play of the contrasting images that speak such truths, Heaven. Your poem here is fabulous and I thank you for sharing it. =D
ReplyDeletelovely poem and accompaning photo
ReplyDeleteAnd so should we all in this situation, be looking for the things worth remembering, that is, and letting the useless paper fall off the pins. Enjoyed this much, Heaven.
ReplyDeleteisn't the last line a bit to happy for the tone of the poem? I'd put crying with the wind.....
ReplyDeleteInteresting word choice Dez ~ However,I want to also allude that she is a strong woman, and that she can move on with her life ~
DeleteThanks for the visit ~
superbly done.this could well be the story of another Hamlet and Ophelia.esp the last few lines.stunning.
ReplyDeletetotally beautiful..
ReplyDelete"and dancing with the wind" ...
ReplyDeleteOh, this poem is lovely indeed.
K
Oh, I love that ... with forget-me-nots dancing with the wind.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful :)
as usual, your words are so very vivid.
ReplyDeleteG...can u write a poem for this..http://www.ashokism.blogspot.in/2012/06/musical-abstract.html
ReplyDeleteLet me think about it Ashok and allow the painting to sink into my pen ~ Smiles ~
DeleteI am waiting :)
DeleteSuch a lovely feel to this poem - delicate and you capture an elusive quality also.
ReplyDeletei like that metaphor of just pinning the letters and putting that rubber band up, so really, the person did to the letters what you feel he is doing to you emotionally
ReplyDeletepainting details
Love it!
ReplyDeletereally great close to this grace....love that you are outside in the side open, looking for flowers and dancing...much more freedom that being bound up in those rubber bands...
ReplyDeleteGrace, I love the ending...lovely write!
ReplyDeleteThis is great!
ReplyDeleteThis is great, especially:
ReplyDeleteso don't look for me
in the wooden panels of the room,
pining for the ship to anchor us
i am outside,
stumbling for Forget-Me-Nots,
and dancing with the wind
I was about to quote the last two as Laurie just did, too. I love the contrast visually, emotionally the shift that happens between the two stanzas here.
ReplyDeleteThe entire poem is brimming with many, lovely lines, Heaven!! Such a thrill to see the title of the photo weaving its way into the piece as well! Thank you for this!!
excellent
ReplyDeleteGrace I think is perfect!
ReplyDeleteHow cool was that play on the two pics. Your penchant for the creative flair never disappoints. Loved it form stem to stern especially the last stanza...I think dancing works quite well. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful combination of two prompts...love the ending...stumbling for Forget-Me-Nots and dancing with the wind.
ReplyDeleteExcellent. I admire what you did with this.
ReplyDeleteVery uncontained, Heaven ! . Thanks
ReplyDeleteThis is a deep and thoughtful poem. The imagery fits the picture prompt perfectly. Well done.
ReplyDeleteForget-me-nots can be hard to find - well done. k.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite part is the rubber bands...
ReplyDeleteOne of your best. You provide a clear picture of this relationship and then shift at just the right time. Nice contrast.
ReplyDeletehttp://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/06/08/lighten-your-own-load/
this poem is so lovely, reads like quicksilver.
ReplyDeleteThat was really magical how you made the connection. I'm stuck on words like 'dangling' in this piece, awesome. After stumbling, I'm happy that your feet were left to play with the wind.
ReplyDeleteRT has been wonderful this weekend, I'll definitely visit again. Thanks for the warm welcome. :)
So lovely, and I'm off to dance in the wind as well!
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful unique take on this prompt...enchanting, from start to finish
ReplyDeletehttp://thepoet-tree-house.blogspot.ca/2012/06/love-letters-of-promises-and-regret.html
Another beautiful piece with 'for-get-me-nots' included. I so connect with this poem. Commenting from Poetry Pantry.
ReplyDeletethis one has become one of my favorites.
ReplyDeleteAhh, I love this and where it lead to the dancing in the wind, stumbling for the forget-me-nots. beautiful scene.
ReplyDeleteThis is excellent!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]