Sunday, 10 June 2012

Stumbling for Forget-Me-Nots

 Still Life, 1670, detail by Jean Fran├žois de Le Motte



you wrote a letter
and pinned it on the board
forgotten

you scribbled sweet nothings 
across pamphelt and left it 
dangling      

you hid the truth under the 
flowing strokes, obscure lines 
in the journal of us

your words hammered  
until they were rubber bands, 
wounding tight around my chest

so don't look for me 
in the wooden panels of the room,
pining for the ship to anchor us    

i am outside, 
stumbling for Forget-Me-Nots,
and dancing with the wind  


                                           Copy Right © 2012 Hannah Gosselin ~ Stumbling for Forget-Me-Nots


                                                                    
Posted for:   The Mag 121
and Imaginary Garden with Real Toads:   Photography by Hannah Gosselin  

48 comments:

  1. Some great word play in this one, not to mention the imagery, truly excellent.

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  2. excellent!! I got the picture right away!! Laurel

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  3. Awesome, Heaven.
    LOVE:
    "you hid the truth under the
    flowing strokes, obscure lines
    in the journal of us"
    and
    "i am outside,
    stumbling for Forget-Me-Nots,
    and dancing with the wind"

    "don't look for me," indeed. Wonderful.

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  4. Hopefully you ind the forget me nots out there too.

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  5. A very nice theme to go with, wave length

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  6. Truth hidden in fancy flourishes...mmmm....spot on!

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  7. How very beautiful. I love the originality of this piece, which combines both images seamlessly.

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  8. I love the play of the contrasting images that speak such truths, Heaven. Your poem here is fabulous and I thank you for sharing it. =D

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  9. lovely poem and accompaning photo

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  10. And so should we all in this situation, be looking for the things worth remembering, that is, and letting the useless paper fall off the pins. Enjoyed this much, Heaven.

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  11. isn't the last line a bit to happy for the tone of the poem? I'd put crying with the wind.....

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    1. Interesting word choice Dez ~ However,I want to also allude that she is a strong woman, and that she can move on with her life ~

      Thanks for the visit ~

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  12. superbly done.this could well be the story of another Hamlet and Ophelia.esp the last few lines.stunning.

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  13. "and dancing with the wind" ...
    Oh, this poem is lovely indeed.
    K

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  14. Oh, I love that ... with forget-me-nots dancing with the wind.
    Beautiful :)

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  15. as usual, your words are so very vivid.

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  16. G...can u write a poem for this..http://www.ashokism.blogspot.in/2012/06/musical-abstract.html

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    1. Let me think about it Ashok and allow the painting to sink into my pen ~ Smiles ~

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  17. Such a lovely feel to this poem - delicate and you capture an elusive quality also.

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  18. i like that metaphor of just pinning the letters and putting that rubber band up, so really, the person did to the letters what you feel he is doing to you emotionally

    painting details

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  19. really great close to this grace....love that you are outside in the side open, looking for flowers and dancing...much more freedom that being bound up in those rubber bands...

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  20. Grace, I love the ending...lovely write!

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  21. This is great, especially:

    so don't look for me
    in the wooden panels of the room,
    pining for the ship to anchor us


    i am outside,
    stumbling for Forget-Me-Nots,
    and dancing with the wind

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  22. I was about to quote the last two as Laurie just did, too. I love the contrast visually, emotionally the shift that happens between the two stanzas here.

    The entire poem is brimming with many, lovely lines, Heaven!! Such a thrill to see the title of the photo weaving its way into the piece as well! Thank you for this!!

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  23. How cool was that play on the two pics. Your penchant for the creative flair never disappoints. Loved it form stem to stern especially the last stanza...I think dancing works quite well. Loved it.

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  24. A beautiful combination of two prompts...love the ending...stumbling for Forget-Me-Nots and dancing with the wind.

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  25. A lovely heart that reads through lines and makes the wisest, most fulfilling decisions. Liked this very much!

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  26. Excellent. I admire what you did with this.

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  27. Very uncontained, Heaven ! . Thanks

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  28. This is a deep and thoughtful poem. The imagery fits the picture prompt perfectly. Well done.

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  29. Forget-me-nots can be hard to find - well done. k.

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  30. My favorite part is the rubber bands...

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  31. One of your best. You provide a clear picture of this relationship and then shift at just the right time. Nice contrast.
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/06/08/lighten-your-own-load/

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  32. this poem is so lovely, reads like quicksilver.

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  33. That was really magical how you made the connection. I'm stuck on words like 'dangling' in this piece, awesome. After stumbling, I'm happy that your feet were left to play with the wind.

    RT has been wonderful this weekend, I'll definitely visit again. Thanks for the warm welcome. :)

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  34. So lovely, and I'm off to dance in the wind as well!

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  35. What a wonderful unique take on this prompt...enchanting, from start to finish

    http://thepoet-tree-house.blogspot.ca/2012/06/love-letters-of-promises-and-regret.html

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  36. Another beautiful piece with 'for-get-me-nots' included. I so connect with this poem. Commenting from Poetry Pantry.

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  37. this one has become one of my favorites.

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  38. Ahh, I love this and where it lead to the dancing in the wind, stumbling for the forget-me-nots. beautiful scene.

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