read my letter as
you would pare ripe fruit - juiced
liquid clinging thick
words settle on your tongue - soft
as snowflake, tanged with sugar
~0~0~
moon song - velvety
against swaying maple trees
your face is candle
flicking deep night stars - amber
against slope of my chest - pinked
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Tanka, hosted by Kanzensakura.
Thanks for the visit.
These are both so very beautiful I love the luscious sensual aspect of the love letter, juiced like pared fruit -- sweetness and tang of lips -- reading delicious.
ReplyDeleteYour face as candle shifts me from the outdoor scene to the indoor love. Wonderfully and subtlety done.
These are both so lovely and you are writing as Scarlet...which means sensual from you. Both of these are very sensual but subtle as a feather on skin. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteSecond verse was brilliant.
ReplyDeleteI can easily see why these are your favorites... somehow your use of fruits and that juice is like Georgia O'Keefe painted her fruits.. luscious..
ReplyDeleteI am so totally smitten with these!! ❤️
ReplyDeleteVery sensual. I caught myself biting my lip after reading. :)
ReplyDeleteLovely Grace, done in your signature style :)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and sensual. I like the first tanka best. :)
ReplyDeleteBoth are so beautifully writ, the first tinged with deep sensuality.
ReplyDeleteI think you may have mastered the art of the tanka, Grace. Love the image of reading a letter like juiced fruit...very sensual and suggestive. I like your use of colors in your second tanka...very effective. Both, just perfect!
ReplyDeleteLove "read my letter like you would pare ripe fruit". A simply delicious simile!
ReplyDeleteWould sure get a little thrill but fit the bill haha
ReplyDeleteyour use of enjambment makes the juice of these two tankas flow with so much ease and grace
ReplyDeleteBlankets of
ReplyDeletepattern love
spread quilt
of linGeRinG
Love..:)
Juicing will make the face expand full of goodness and colored amber at night!
ReplyDeleteHank
Gorgeous as ever – and everything tanka should be, I think.
ReplyDeleteJust wow. That's all. Just wow!
ReplyDeleteI hope this finds you and yours doing well. May we display your header on our new site directory? As it is now, the site title (linked back to its home page) is listed, and we think displaying the header will attract more attention. In any event, we hope you will come by and see what is going on at SiteHoundSniffs.com.
ReplyDelete