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Bid the sun to rise soft as dew
On my skin, rain-fragrant trail
And I will bloom, pink and new
Where the knot tangles cold residue
and turns kisses to fading memories
Bid the sun to rise soft as dew
There's sap on my palms, honeydew
on my lips, bees on my knees-
Soon, I will bloom, pink and new
Wrapping away winter's bluff, so blue
Paint my core-seeds cerise
Bid the sun to rise soft as dew
There's a spell to brew
Ripening petals in quivering tryst
This blooming, pink and new
I want to do with you
what spring does with the cherry trees
Bid the sun to rise soft as dew
And blooming, I am pink and new
* From Pablo Neruda poem's Everyday You Play:
I want to do with you
what spring does with the cherry trees
Posted for Poets United - Cherry Blossoms
and D'verse Poets Pub - Villanelle poetry form - 19 line poetry form with two repeating rhymes and two refrains ~ Join me later at 3pm EST ~
Oh, what a charm, what a proposal. Could a God be more loving, erotic and explicit down to the color and texture and body part? Could a human? You and Pablo and Japanese Haiku blend here. Brilliant.
ReplyDeleteHmm can't say I'd pass up such an instance as spring is sprung on me lol
ReplyDeletei love the rhymes within this beautiful piece..like joined petals falling through the verses
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, Grace. Your poem has a careful, delicate touch that I certainly enjoy reading today. The lines from Neruda's amalgamate so well with thine own words. Smiles. Thanks for the poem!
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How nice to be inspired by Pablo Neruda. I too like the rhymes, but what I like most is the idea of blooming like the blossoms, which you heighten with your choice of words so sensual and rich. Beautiful writing Grace.
ReplyDeleteThis is such a uniquely charming poem. Love the imagery.Its so moving; I m literally out of words to describe how beautiful this poem is :D Bravo!
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Oh, Grace!! This is lush! I love what you did with your inspired line and also the lines that you bring back throughout...it builds like a spectacular spring climax! Gorgeous.
ReplyDeleteInspired by Neruda, stimulated by Peralta, drenched in Japanese form captured in French form, wow, just boy howdy, --you eclipsed your own prompt by three, & what remains is honeydew tender & cherry blossom fragrant. I had to work like a mule to meet even the bare bones of the form, but enjoyed the challenge regardless. Like your line /wrapping away winter's bluff, so blue/paint my core-seeds cerise/.
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful. I like how you changed up the second repeating line but kept the first the same throughout. Very nice villanelle; excellent tribute to spring. Peace, Linda
ReplyDeleteI think this is one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read. After reading, I can only wipe tears from my eyes and wonder....how such written words could be as lovely and graceful as the blossoms themselves.
ReplyDeleteCherry Blossoms the essence of a fresh kiss the inspiration for a heated ...
ReplyDeleteThis is so visually beautiful, Grace. Just lovely.
ReplyDeleteCame back to read it again when I learned it is a villanelle, a form which looks challenging but which I am contemplating, thanks to Sam's essay at dVerse which you posted today. Thanks for that!
DeleteWriting to form is good for the poetic muscles, smiles ~
DeleteLeaves me with a glow... beautiful.
ReplyDeleteA soft and gentle poem with a beautiful lilt to it! I can just see those cherry blossoms upon the trees.
ReplyDeleteTruly wonderful Grace - reading this is like having been born again.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very visual and sensual poem, Grace. I like how you use the extended metaphor of the pink blossoms throughout your poem.
ReplyDeleteWow, Grace, this is utterly breathtaking....soft, sensual, lovely but also pulsing with passion....this is absolutely stunning: "Ripening petals in quivering tryst"--love it!
ReplyDeleteStunning Grace, you make me want to go kiss the cherry tree in my yard, that just bloomed ;D
ReplyDeleteOutstanding!
So, so beautiful, seasonal, gentle, seasonal - one of my favourite Neruda lines, by the way!
ReplyDeleteThis really involves all the senses--I could smell the fragrance, feel the sap on my hands and taste it; and see the blossoms, almost hear them bursting forth.
ReplyDeletedelicate beauty so subtly woven..."Bid the sun to rise soft as dew"...feel like singing the line all day....so beautiful Grace!!
ReplyDeleteWonderful poem. I like the idea expressed here.
ReplyDeleteA lovely poem filled with the scents of the cherry blossoms. I hope you have a wonderful weekend Grace.
ReplyDeleteThere's something so endearing about "Bid the sun to rise soft as dew"
ReplyDeleteBeautiulkly dine!
ReplyDeleteI liked the melody of your words as well as everything the rest liked :-)
ReplyDeleteYup--I am late to the party Grace--but this is wonderfully fun and erotic and tender--
ReplyDeletewhew! stellar pen, Grace - languid and steamy ~
ReplyDeletereally like how you kept the A1 refrain the same throughout, but subtly changed the A2 refrain with each useage. That one static line kept the poem focused, but the other helped it to evolve. Very nicely done!
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