Sunday, 25 January 2015

A list of what the flower owns


Pinch of morning 
rain slicking blades green

Remnant of snake's skin
warm & dangerous

Secrets of bees
As they circle as matadors

Devouring all affections,
Making you hungry for stinging 

Kisses.  Perfume. Cinnamon 
seeds.  Volley of crisp winter air 

that guzzles your lungs
flaring your nostrils red

your skin honey-yellow moist
when I am

opening 
to you-



Photography by Totomai Martinez


Posted for Imaginary Garden for Real Toads:   Play it Again - Write a Flowery Poem in a Non-cliched way & Word Count With MamaZen (Hungry in 57 Words) & Poets United

43 comments:

  1. a metaphor of being submissive i guess. the way the poem flowed towards the ending.

    guess you're missing the gumamelas :-)

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  2. So utterly delicious word gathering here, Grace. Like the naughty way to end this piece. Lovely as forever & always, your writing was. Smiles.

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  3. This is exquisite - not a clinch in sight. You have included a subtle blend of sensory images that bring the picture to life.

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    1. My tablet auto-corrected 'cliché'. Sorry about the clinch.

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  4. The flower as an extended metaphor definitely goes way beyond the cliché and the last two lines make me read the lines again.

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  5. Opening up is a sure sign of trust.

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  6. All the most wonderful things in life are tinged by a sting ...maybe it wakes something up

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  7. You took the flower imagery an extra step. "Opening to you" transports the poem to another level.

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  8. Wonderful title, Grace, love the first 6 lines and then the steamy turn.

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  9. ha. def some subtle but very sensual touches all through out this...and it builds nicely throughout....warm and dangerous is not a bad place to be either...ha...smiles.

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  10. nice... i like the snake skin part a lot - warm and dangerous, the bees secrets and the inclusion of scent...hmmmm

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  11. Cinnamon and honey, don't they go together for good health? Yes they do! Wonderful lines Grace!

    Hank

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  12. Self is a perfect winter flower, with al a flowers gifts! Bravo!

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  13. In the midst of this gray winter, your flowers and imagery are most welcome this morning. Have a great Sunday!

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  14. Now that is an opening I wouldn't mind haha oh you meant just a flower?

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  15. So sensual, embracing the lighter and darker sides. Beautiful!

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  16. A pinch of morning and the secrets of bees....how wonderful! I loved this.

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  17. oh we both used cinnamon and honey in our poems ~ great minds think alike ~ smiles :) love the opening up at the end, lots of layers here.

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  18. I like how colorful and warming this poem is. It was serene and helped me envy the spring.

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  19. Love the image of
    'Secrets of bees
    As they circle as matadors'....oh to be a flower!

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  20. I enjoyed reading your words each couplet unique. I image the flower holds many secrets of the bees as they rest and drink her nectar.

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  21. it is indeed beautiful to open up to another wild flower

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  22. Such a yummy and sensual poem, Grace. Love it!

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  23. So many delightful layers to this… just like a flowers petals. Nicely done!

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  24. I had to visit again. This poem is like a magnet!

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  25. I love the choice of words here - really touches and emotions and senses!

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  26. Skilled work - you really know how to explore our senses in poetry!

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  27. Wow, this is the essence of eternal happiness...

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  28. The hibiscus is the perfect ending Grace. Lovely verse

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  29. Ah, yes, Grace, you flower is rich for sure, mostly in intangible treasures.
    ..
    We are home from cruising now after spending Sunday afternoon and night with our kids and grand-daughter, KP.
    ..

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  30. Whoa - very sensual! Love it, Grace.

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  31. Amazing, sensual, colorful and just plain GOOD

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  32. Lovely, Grace. I could not help but attribute your stanzas to we humans as well, and I smiled.

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  33. Sensual indeed and reads like a recipe...delicious, Grace!

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