Snowdrops (Model: Jane Morris)
Dante Gabriel Rossetti: Creative Commons
Dante Gabriel Rossetti: Creative Commons
White snowdrop is gentle
Not I – a shrub with heartless blooms
Dark secrets brew from my kettle
Spells of love doom
Adorn these walls of scentless leaves and nettles
Morning sky is faithful
Not I - reckless as the sea tide
Searching for fruits – sourly brittle
Uneven sides
My words knife your chest – hush – death is gentle
Poetry form: 5 Lines of 6-8-8-4-10 syllables and rhyming scheme of a b a b a~
Posted for Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Open Link Night and Sunday's Mini-challenge ~ Thanks for the visit ~
Like the back and forth aspect as the comparision fly, hope you have a great day and no snow come from the sky.
ReplyDeleteThanks Pat ~ Mercifully, no snow today, just sun shining and blue sky ~
DeleteI think this is an astounding interpretation of the portrait. There is something deadly and enticing about that face.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kerry for the challenge ~ Took me time to write to the form and image ~
DeleteThat last line really packs a wicked punch. Words can definitely be as hurtful as a knife, can kill a lot of feelings very effectively!
ReplyDeleteWords can hurt, so true Mary ~ Thank you for the visit ~
DeleteThis is so beautiful and just sums up how I felt the minute that I stared at this portrait, amazing stuff Heaven.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the compliment and visit Matthew ~
Deletethat death doesn't sound very gentle :)
ReplyDeleteNot at all ~ Thanks for the visit Marian ~
Deleterather Shakespearean in spirit :)
ReplyDeleteGood to know Dez ~ Thanks ~
DeleteThis is such an original and unexpected response to the prompt photo - "Dark secrets brew from my kettle".......wowzers! Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sherry ~ The form was quite a challenge ~
Deleteyou have taken the sullenness of the painting to an altogether different level.your words cryptically elaborate some of the ideas of the painting to create a masterly text.
ReplyDeleteThank you Abin for the compliment and visit ~
DeleteI too think you captured the painting's mood!
ReplyDeleteI love the lyrical notes, too
Yes, it does have a Shakespearean tone~
Thank you Ella ~
Deletenice texture in the leaves and nettles....interesting turn in the second stanza...esp that last line....the knifing and gentle...nice subtle contrast that....smiles.
ReplyDeleteYes, I was striving for that effect ~ Thank you for the support and visit Brian ~
DeleteSurprisingly stark contrast. The first time through I tried to imagine what the opposing flower was. I never thought of the portrait! Even now, I'm inclined to think of the flower vs. the snow itself which cuts in its way. I love the images in the poem.
ReplyDeletenot gentle...
ReplyDeletenot faithful...
ahh, but oh so truthful.
I like how each first line sets up the remaining to express what you are not. I also like the last line—for words can truly piece like a knife and because if how you bring the poem back to "gentle."
well done... gorgeous imagery and drama in this poem.
ReplyDeletethe image. the image of the words. stunning!
ReplyDeletei love the last line. i could just live in it for a bit. :)
oohh, Heaven, this took a rather wicked twist. I love it!
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful, Grace. I kept going back to this phrase: "a shrub with heartless blooms" because I know it means something to me, but I just can't extract the reason from my memory. It will come when it's ready. In the meantime — a wonderful poem. (Did you also link this to Sunday's prompt? If not, you should, although it works just as well for Open Link Monday.)
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That verse came to me in flash, thanks Kay ~ I have also linked it up to Sunday's prompt ~
DeleteAwesome as always Heaven. Not I -- scary. I love: 'Dark secrets brew from my kettle
ReplyDeleteSpells of love doom ..'
I've been off the blogs getting the first draft of my novel completed. Stopping by to say hi! :D
oh this is nicely done! What else will go with that picture. Great write...
ReplyDeletePuts a little bit of...'killing me softly' into this. She is sweet but, deadly.
ReplyDeleteWow... very nice.
Beautiful! I've missed reading your work :)
ReplyDeleteQuite a lovely, lyrical piece when one considers it is a confession of betrayal! Well done.
ReplyDeletehttp://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/12/03/therein-lies-the-answer/
beware of word knives - you got 'em Heaven!
ReplyDeleteReally a wonderful piece--I love hos lyrical it is in the face of the knives--great piece
ReplyDeleteDark secrets brew from my kettle
ReplyDeletehush~death is gentle
really cool stuff, Grace!
i LOVE the "Not I"s ~ great take on the form, Heaven!!
ReplyDeletehope all is well with you, dear!
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Bitingly bittersweet, Heaven.
ReplyDeleteThe rhyme scheme is structured but it moves so free.
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