Saturday, 9 November 2013

Time is water



November makes you thirsty.
      

      You wake up and the room is flooded

      Water is a good thing, you say
      It is part of the architecture & enhances
      the value of the house
 
Water is more precious than gold.

      You peer out the window, oxygen-starved -
      Is it strange that you don't freeze when
      furnitures are rain soaked, elated as clouds-

      You have just french kissed your lover 
      but already he is floating  away-
      seaweed hunting, he says -  

You turn away, a wildflower in second place.   

      Where is this storm that you're dreaming:
      unstoppable tides, sky colored flames-

      Perhaps it only exists in your screen saver     
      Or canvas abundant of salt & departing things   

      
This bottled water is drug.


Posted for Imaginary Garden for Real Toads - Sunday Feature by surreal work of Mike Worrall where I am hosting ~  Thanks for the visit ~  
Shared with Poets United

49 comments:

  1. great interpretation of the painting..you got all the aspects into the poem... this line was so good...
    You turn away, a wildflower in second place.

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  2. Your poem complements this painting perfectly - they are a matched set.

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    1. Thanks Sam ~ The elements in the painting made it easy for me ~

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  3. Great work here! There is such a soaked free ambience here, the way lovers pour themselves into each other. Loved it.

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  4. What a fabulous write this is! So many wonderful lines!

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  5. Wow! Exquisite, and lined up like a work of art itself. The preciousness of water, and then the floating, the preciousness of buds. A fine moment to hold on to or let go of.

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    1. Thanks Susan ~ Hope you can write for the prompt ~

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  6. Could not imagine better words for that painting.

    A wildflower in second place, I love that.

    And I do believe November DOES make one thirsty.

    Scarlet Verses -- loving the imagery of that, lovely lady.

    Take care!
    oxooxoxxo

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  7. also captivated by that wildflower in second place, Heaven. the write suits the image ~

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  8. water is a commodity....or will be one day i imagine...amazing that we pay so much for water now...and i wonder if it will only get more you know...the less we honor it...the lover floating away/wildflower in second place lines really stand out to me grace..

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    1. We take it for granted sometimes, like time I suppose ~ Thanks Brian ~

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  9. Fabulous imagery, Grace. I adore the wildflower in second place line.

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  10. Water costs a ton now a days, most is polluted too, sure drowned water out and about

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  11. The painting & poem flow together perfectly.

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  12. Whatever we mix in water it absorbs, it does not discriminate like a lover:)

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  13. Where is this storm that you're dreaming:
    unstoppable tides, sky colored flames- .......beautiful imagery...

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  14. Water can be life.. water can be death.. just read about the Philippines.. still we have that sacred bottled water... love the see-weed hunting..

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  15. This is so beautiful Heaven. You've made November, a month that I believe not too much happens in seem so important with this, I love it.

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  16. water...the all powerful. i like the combination of the painting and your poem.. they connect really well. you don't know what was first, the words or the painting.

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  17. Water can come out in so many different forms... Beautifully penned and it well complements the painting. :-)
    -HA

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  18. Wow, I love where you took this image. Amazing write, I especially love the lover seaweed hunting.

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  19. I really enjoyed the flow of your poem, Grace. Beautiful.

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  20. the interplay between the visionary and the mundane is fascinating.

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  21. such a delightful abstract one!

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  22. Powerful write! ' You have just french kissed your lover
    but already he is floating away-
    seaweed hunting, he says - ' ~ this lines make me smile :)

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  23. You have the most wonderful imagination, Grace, and this surrealistic piece is nothing short of brilliant. This stanza really stands out for me:

    You have just french kissed your lover
    but already he is floating away-
    seaweed hunting, he says -

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  24. Just really excellent, Grace. One of your best from first to last, consistent, yet surprising, lyric and lush yet almost sternly lucid. Really a fine poem.(Thanks so much for introducing us to this artist, also.)

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  25. Wow. So many beautiful phrases to point out. I read it more than once, enjoyed it. :)

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  26. Your poem is a bit surreal just like the painting. I love the imagery ... and that yearning for something more passionate. Yet the dream doesn't match reality ... she feels second place. Strong emotions you convey. Well done :)

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  27. This is gorgeous grace...There are too many excellent phrases in this to single out only one.

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  28. Nice surreal scene, Grace, all on its own. Wonderful!

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  29. Wow! I love that you brought in the lover that I actually hadn't noticed until you said something, Grace...so perceptive! Thank you for bring us this amazing artist and the challenge!

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  30. I'm another one who didn't see, in the painting, the lover being washed away. "Seaweed hunting" — I love that!
    K

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  31. Surreal and lovely and dark, perfect for the picture.

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  32. I loved the magic here...not only in the beautiful artwork and the gorgeous poetry, but in how perfectly they complimented each other.

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  33. "You turn away, a wildflower in second place"

    I like that.

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  34. I love how carefree your poem is-"ah, well..."
    Your words do bring the art to life~
    Nice challenge!
    I wrote mine and will post in the Open Garden....

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  35. careening words that bob and sway with surreal perfection.

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  36. GREAT take on the image, Grace! i enjoyed the prompt and the artwork, too.

    hope you have a good week.

    dani

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  37. That first line drew me right in! I loved every word of this wild ride!

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  38. I love this! 'wildflower in second place'

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  39. Wow! That was beautiful. Your structure, your prose.... Amazing.

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