Afternoon sun touches lightly the hair of Susie
As she waits with one suitcase & one way ticket
She is smiling with that light that drive away blues
As she thinks of her love like a secret
A rebel, she's walking away from her family's fortune
As she counts down the time, her hands clasp
& unfolds his letter like flint to her cold hands:
This fire we make, this love to last
Though Susie is 19 & just out of college,
She knows he's the one she's going to marry first
Dashing & wild among men, she followed her guts:
This fire we make, this love to last
No rings nor flowers nor money, but she didn't care
Here he comes now in an old white car at last
She feels the world bursting inside her, when he said:
This fire we make, this love to last
Though Susie is 19 & just out of college,
She knows he's the one she's going to marry first
After 50 years, she tells me: she won the lottery when he said:
This fire we make, this love to last
Posted for: D'verse Poets Pub - Thanks for bearing up with my amateur lyrics, smiles ~
and Poets United - Mid-week Motif: Love - This is based on my mom's story, who eloped at age 19 with my dad.
Picture credit: here
What a beautiful love story, Grace. She walked away from her family's fortune and found her own! Wonderful to read of young love like this that lasts!
ReplyDeleteA lot of challenges but they stuck together, smiles ~ Thanks Mary ~
DeleteAw. What a romantic story. Fifty years huh? That's something to sing about. I hope you show your Mom this lovely poem.
ReplyDeleteMore than 50 years, I think ~ Thanks Myrna ~
Deleteah this is beautiful... when he is the right one, you just know... and you're ready to leave everything else behind...it's brave...it's crazy...it's love...
ReplyDeleteIt's very brave alright ~ I didn't meet my mother's side until I was like 6 yrs old, when she reconciled with her family ~ Don't think I can be that rash ~ Thanks Claudia ~
DeleteAw. And YAY for making choices that turn out to be right! I like this Ballad. For a song, I might add a refrain like "You Go, Susie, Show us the Way, Susie!" (Just kidding.) And then to read this is a true story!
ReplyDeleteI might just add that line, thanks Susan ~
DeleteSounds a little on the Johnny Cash side Grace. Nice song. >KB
ReplyDeleteThanks KB ~
DeleteIt is a def a ballad, a song of hope, faith, & renewal; so cool to even just hear that some folks did not court or spark for years, and still found a lasting union; three marriages for me, and my "real" wife and I are now on our 21st year.
ReplyDeleteCongrats on your milestone Glenn ~ Thanks ~
DeleteWonderful sweet love story.. Some relationships just clicks... Others just end
ReplyDeleteThe wonder of it ~ Thanks Bjorn ~
DeleteI know couples like that - it's quite an adventure. Would make a heck of a country song I think. I can hear Reba singing it. Nice work Grace.
ReplyDeleteCountry song, you say ~ Thanks Gay ~
DeleteVery sweet story! It makes me feel good that it is based on your parents' real love story.
ReplyDeleteThanks Gabriella ~
Deletei would like to hear the tune you heard when you were writing this...a love that endures is a beautiful thing....and when you have love truly...all that extra is just that...extra...
ReplyDeleteSome sappy ballad song, smiles ~ Thanks Brian ~
DeleteLove this. Glad to see a happy ending (or should that be continuing??) in a first marriage! :-)
ReplyDeleteFirst and only ~ Thanks Bryan ~
DeleteThough Susie is 19 & just out of college
ReplyDeletea very pliable line, just right to be sung.
Love Susie for being strong...I think I hear a little Johnny or June Carter Cash as well ;)
ReplyDeleteAah, true love, what a wonderful thing... Good for her!
ReplyDeletenicely done... a good story told that'd be worth singing
ReplyDeleteThis fire we make, this love to last
ReplyDeleteWonderful story, beautifully told. And I love the picture too.
ReplyDeleteThe leap of faith. "This fire we make, this love to last" Damn that's so good! So beautifully told and the accompanying picture makes it all the more perfect.
ReplyDeletelove your repeating line
ReplyDelete"this fire we make, this love to last"
sigh...
Thank you ~
Deletejust a lovely ballad, Grace - your lyrics sang to me
ReplyDeleteThank you ~
Delete50 years, and taking the plunge, sounds like they knew indeed
ReplyDeleteIt's like a lottery, she would tell me ~ Sometimes you are lucky ~ Sometimes you are not ~ Thanks Pat ~
DeleteI read that and think of my daughters, and my hope that they find love so true
ReplyDeleteIt took a lot of work, I can assure you ~ Thanks for your visit ~
DeleteYou'll walk away from fortunes when you're in love at that age. What a beautiful tale, Grace...and happy it lasted.
ReplyDeleteLove that lasts is something to sing about...I really like the repeating line.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful :)
ReplyDeleteI unfortunately probably chested and put up music and wrote the words. I do not think I could make anything quite as beautiful as some of what I have read and yours is no exception Grace. So glad they have such a wonderful relationship still ~ smiles
ReplyDelete50 years it held on! More than just a love story but a risk and sacrifice that worked wonders. It's just amazing! Great write Grace!
ReplyDeleteHank
Love that is a rarity these days. Well done.
ReplyDeleteI love happy endings. What an inspiration (in more ways than one) your parents give. :-) Happy weekend, Grace. :-)
ReplyDeletebeautiful!
ReplyDeleteShe must have been quite the catch for him beautiful, background of class/culture, and smart enough to have finished collage by age 19. Fairy tale love story; the kind all us tortured romantics crave.
ReplyDeleteI love refains and yours is perfect. love that line about the letter like flint to start the fire. Excellent! :-)
ReplyDeleteAmateur? Doubtful, my friend. It reminds me of when I knew Senior would be my first husband. Beautiful. As always, thank you and have a fantastic week!
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