tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post1882591518664824713..comments2023-10-02T16:21:04.111-04:00Comments on Scarlet Verses: Friday Romantic Challenge: Coming HomeScarlethttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-3148362486079559812011-07-25T14:34:12.545-04:002011-07-25T14:34:12.545-04:00I adore your poetry and this is such a beautiful a...I adore your poetry and this is such a beautiful and painful take on the theme. Evocative and heartbreaking.Margo Bensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06759845391358543223noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-76258391734732082412011-07-25T11:35:17.990-04:002011-07-25T11:35:17.990-04:00You touched on all the stages of loving a warrior,...You touched on all the stages of loving a warrior, including that of grief.Mike Patrickhttp://thepoetsquill.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-84485327334764644452011-07-25T07:38:30.988-04:002011-07-25T07:38:30.988-04:00the repetition really makes this poem - good style...the repetition really makes this poem - good styleBrother Olliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07506492407482879487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-28721537466728102002011-07-24T21:15:30.221-04:002011-07-24T21:15:30.221-04:00way to go,way to go,Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01546696605935159862noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-60720083831140298002011-07-24T18:48:34.737-04:002011-07-24T18:48:34.737-04:00Heaven,
I liked your words very much indeed.
You ...Heaven,<br /><br />I liked your words very much indeed.<br />You have captured the real human feeling of love and loss, so very well.<br /><br />EileenEileen T O'Neill .....https://www.blogger.com/profile/03325632298717325699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-37785687269196338822011-07-24T17:28:43.154-04:002011-07-24T17:28:43.154-04:00This is sad but well written.This is sad but well written.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-52332985540818125842011-07-24T16:57:50.831-04:002011-07-24T16:57:50.831-04:00Full of emotion and I loved the refrain - My eyes ...Full of emotion and I loved the refrain - My eyes dried out of tearsJo Bryanthttp://www.jobryant.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-43192444370065971352011-07-24T16:46:27.896-04:002011-07-24T16:46:27.896-04:00Very strong and evocative. Your writing is wonderf...Very strong and evocative. Your writing is wonderful because I can sense how you feel.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-29155982348511960162011-07-23T07:06:41.865-04:002011-07-23T07:06:41.865-04:00Thank you for your wonderful words. I feel very ...Thank you for your wonderful words. I feel very encouraged to write more of this theme. I don't normally write sad romance stories but thought it would be interesting to write this. I read some blogs by military wives/partners to gain insights on their feelings. And its really sad.<br /><br />As to the line - My eyes dried out of tears - this phrase became the "backbone" of this story. I feel that if I change this, it would not have the same impact. Thanks again for your feedback ~Scarlethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-85108281215779156462011-07-22T23:32:49.523-04:002011-07-22T23:32:49.523-04:00Emotionally gripping. My heart is broken for her ...Emotionally gripping. My heart is broken for her loss. "Wait for me" was so well timed and beautiful.<br /><br />........dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-57282239883322732122011-07-22T21:54:56.569-04:002011-07-22T21:54:56.569-04:00Wonderful writing. Poignant all too real for some....Wonderful writing. Poignant all too real for some.J.L. Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05666634455836834179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-26616322615938774282011-07-22T18:57:16.375-04:002011-07-22T18:57:16.375-04:00I feel like crying after reading that. Emotional h...I feel like crying after reading that. Emotional home coming. Well written.Kiru Tayehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03285263322486836620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-10565913888247912222011-07-22T15:26:01.454-04:002011-07-22T15:26:01.454-04:00Hi,
This is so romantic, so full of loss and pain...Hi,<br /><br />This is so romantic, so full of loss and pain, and the rhythm of the prose flows beautifully. A sad home coming, indeed. <br /><br />Poetry can often seem out of context or not as expected to the uninitiated, but a line of this altered would steal the voice away. ;)<br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-36302617655753239452011-07-22T11:23:21.603-04:002011-07-22T11:23:21.603-04:00Heaven, I love your work, and MOST of this poem wo...Heaven, I love your work, and MOST of this poem works well for me, and gives me the sad, poignant feeling you're trying to express.<br /><br />This line, however: "My eyes dried out of tears" - I understand what you are trying to say - the person has wept so long and hard there aren't any tears left, the eyes are now dry and burning. Been there, cried that. And I <em>love</em> the repetition, that part works well, but that phrase itself feels a bit awkward, and took me out of the mood a little bit. Others may feel differently, of course. :-) <em>If</em> you choose to polish this, I would look for a better way to express that phrase.Beverly Diehlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00392288953821757887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-81695050004507898272011-07-22T11:16:06.726-04:002011-07-22T11:16:06.726-04:00So emotional and poignant, you captured the whole ...So emotional and poignant, you captured the whole essence of love and loss.Paula Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10040623635956769807noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-26573847765150696622011-07-22T05:41:07.460-04:002011-07-22T05:41:07.460-04:00Hi Heaven. Welcome to RFWers. First time I've ...Hi Heaven. Welcome to RFWers. First time I've read your work and I'm blown away by the emotion of your words. You captured the theme wonderfully.<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-6276247687257724412011-07-21T21:18:56.569-04:002011-07-21T21:18:56.569-04:00This is very sad but wonderfully expressed!
Bravo,...This is very sad but wonderfully expressed!<br />Bravo, Heaven, on your writing ability!<br /><br />Margie :)Margiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14433759763753850718noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-74227799970322434762011-07-21T16:51:15.746-04:002011-07-21T16:51:15.746-04:00great piece...you capture a lot of the feeling...s...great piece...you capture a lot of the feeling...seeing them leave and knowing they may never come home...sad....Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-10375271623016180962011-07-21T15:11:10.183-04:002011-07-21T15:11:10.183-04:00Yes, it's all too real for some, too.
Poignant...Yes, it's all too real for some, too.<br />Poignant, and heartbreaking to have to be the bearer of that home coming.<br />A lovely tribute.<br />(I was in the Women's Royal Army Corps for 4 Years)Daydreamertoohttp://daydreamertoo.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-14810299778392787732011-07-21T14:57:18.164-04:002011-07-21T14:57:18.164-04:00this is so painful:(
You expressed the emotions in...this is so painful:(<br />You expressed the emotions in a very poignant manner..tarunimahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00924642457573448209noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-3602151482055337342011-07-21T13:36:10.656-04:002011-07-21T13:36:10.656-04:00Wonderful capture of the moment and how hard it is...Wonderful capture of the moment and how hard it is to deal with.Pat Hatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07745293224202430152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-79273078507560662172011-07-21T12:09:27.938-04:002011-07-21T12:09:27.938-04:00Very touching.Very touching.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-38876627528520110712011-07-21T12:06:18.938-04:002011-07-21T12:06:18.938-04:00Heaven, this is an all too painful reality of the ...Heaven, this is an all too painful reality of the wages of war.<br />You expressed it beautifully.The Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667034322952126127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3925421712367848826.post-25291589774330344712011-07-21T11:36:40.514-04:002011-07-21T11:36:40.514-04:00You captured the emotion so well, I felt every pai...You captured the emotion so well, I felt every painful moment...truly beautifulAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com